child eater

I: Mistake [Working Title]

I really feel I reached my peak with Hello so this is more of an attempt to claw back something I really loved, because he disappeared from every aspect of my creative mind when Hello ended and I feel depressed when I think of him.

I have no idea if this story will continue, but it may do if people like it. I really need to find something I’m as passionate about as Hello, but it’s been months and I doubt I ever will.

 

Mistake page 1

Miscarriage

Simply an instance where Yestin got far too excited.
Simply an instance when he couldn’t help himself.
Simply an instance when he became hungry for its premature soul.

You may as well get rid of the body. It’s not as if it’s needed.
No soul, no birth. It’s that simple.

So don’t worry.
The baby, yours or whoever’s, they’re safe.
They’re fuelling him.
And therefore fuelling me.

IV: Hello

I: Hello
II: Hello
III: Hello

 

Hello P8Hello P9

If you have the time, or the energy, or enough power on your electronic device, help me out? I’ve got a few things I want to know and I need other people’s eyes for that.

How does my character come across? (Do you feel for/like/dislike them and why?)
Has your view or judgement changed? (Do you like them more or less, what did you feel about the character? Do you have an image of the character in your head?)
Do you want to read more or are you quite content to stop here?
Thank you for letting me use your eyes.

V: Hello  VI: Hello  VII: Hello

II: Hello

I: Hello

 

Hello P4Hello P5

 

If you have the time, or the energy, or enough power on your electronic device, help me out? I’ve got a few things I want to know and I need other people’s eyes for that.
How does my character come across in this part? Assuming you’ve read I: Hello? (Do you feel for/like/dislike them and why?)
Has your view or judgement changed? (Do you like them more or less, what did you feel about the character? Do you have an image of the character in your head?)
Do you want to read more or are you quite content to stop here?
Thank you for letting me use your eyes.

III: Hello  IV: Hello  V: Hello  VI: Hello  VII: Hello